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Removing the Details
I'm finally getting around to making these shorter and undetailed, but I'd like some help with that if it's possible. I've taken the sample of Hanna and Mikoto's story. I believe many of the details can be shortened, but since many details come back later, like the crumpled 100 yen, the fake life Mikoto made up, I find myself failing to shorten it in any meaningful way. Would it be possible for someone to create an example of how I could make the section below shorter and why those particular choices were made? Feel free to edit the section below. ~ Sweet Beanie (talk) 10:31, 3 September 2026 (UTC)
The correct answer is probably to omit all of that. The full details will be linked to anyway, so cut the content down to absolutely the bare essentials. For most stories, it could probably be summarized in a sentence or two. I'll try to give an example for Mikoto and Hanna's story below. You could maybe add more if you want to cover what happened after Mikoto turned into a witch.
Okay I see what you mean. I'll get to it now but more detailed than that. ~ Sweet Beanie (talk) 14:16, 4 September 2026 (UTC)
How do we feel about it now? There's stuff to add from other events but for the stories available, is this goood? ~ Sweet Beanie (talk) 14:00, 5 September 2026 (UTC)
Test Flight
Having had a difficult childhood, being beaten by her father and ignored by her mother—who turned a blind eye to the abuse—Hanna Sarasa is left orphaned when her father is stabbed to death in a brawl and her mother, celebrating her newfound freedom, is struck and killed by a car. Despite trying to be good and heroic in school and the orphanage, she ends up facing relentless bullying.[1]
Mikoto Sena lives in an abusive household with a violent, financially irresponsible father. At school, she pretends to be cheerful while her home life deteriorates, but she avoids going home and also declines social invitations she cannot afford.[2]
One day, Mikoto's mother gives her a crumpled one thousand yen note as allowance, and Mikoto takes the money to buy a knife to kill her father with but hesitates, and instead flees without purchasing it.[2]
Later, near a train station, Mikoto considers running away but cannot decide whether to abandon her mother. Kyubey appears and Mikoto contracts, wishing for her father to go away. Her wish is granted: her father leaves to live with another woman.[2]
Hanna is eventually approached by Kyubey, and she wishes her bullies out of existence, erasing them from everything but her own memories and becoming a Magical Girl.[1]
After her father's departure, Mikoto's mother begins neglecting the household, withholding money for food and frequently going out, worsening their financial situation.[2]
Mikoto discovers her magic allows her to command others and she uses it on a neighbor, making the woman believe Mikoto is her daughter. The neighbor and her husband welcome Mikoto, though they treat her as their actual, now-adult daughter rather than Mikoto herself.[2]
Mikoto throws herself into Magical Girl duties, fighting obsessively and one day sees Hanna struggling against a Familiar. She uses her suggestion magic and saves her, introducing herself afterwards. Mikoto attempts to befriend her, initiating conversations, though Hanna remains guarded and finds Mikoto's persistent efforts amusing rather than genuine. Despite their differences, they decide to team up.[2]
Hanna discovers her innate magic is copying the powers of other Magical Girls, though she could only use one at a time. Mikoto's mind control magic becomes her favorite due to its convenience, which makes Mikoto proud and Hanna happy, allowing both of them to bond.[1]
With Hanna's help, Mikoto discovers her suggestion magic works on herself, thus she uses it to believe she has a loving family and happy school life and temporarily easing her pain. When Hanna offers to meet her parents, Mikoto, still under her own spell, agrees enthusiastically, but after the suggestion wears off, she panics and decides to bring Hanna to the enchanted elderly couple's home instead.[2]
Mikoto confirms the couple remains under her spell and tells them a friend is visiting. At their home, Mikoto and Hanna help prepare dinner and the couple act as loving parents. While cooking, Hanna notices Mikoto looks sad despite claiming to be happy and offers to listen. Mikoto admits feeling unfulfilled and invisible, expressing a desire to be found and not abandoned.[2]
After dinner, Hanna gives Mikoto an exchange diary for sharing Witch information, mentioning Mikoto can also write her thoughts. Mikoto buys them matching pens but struggles with what to write, realizing her habit of lying has obscured her true self.[2]
Mikoto and Hanna continue hunting Witches and Familiars near Mikoto's apartment complex. Mikoto becomes obsessive, driven by fear that her Soul Gem will become too tainted and that Hanna will abandon her if she becomes useless.[2]
One day, while fighting a Witch on the rooftop of the Daito Apartment Complex where Mikoto lived, Hanna and Mikoto encounter Kanagi Izumi and work together to defeat the Witch. Kanagi invites the two of them to fight together in the future, as well as the other Magical Girls in Daito and while Mikoto is friendly to Kanagi, Hanna is more withdrawn. Inwardly, Mikoto is afraid of Kanagi's mind-reading magic and fears exposure, while Hanna fears losing Mikoto.[1][2]
Hanna later confronts Kanagi and urges her to not get involved with Mikoto and to forget about them. though she initially refuses, Hanna transforms and uses her copied Suggestion magic to erase her memory. Delighted by this, Hanna realized she and Mikoto could use their abilities to disappear from the world whenever they wanted, living like ghosts.[1] Unbeknownst to her, Mikoto had approached Kanagi with the same purpose as Hanna and sees her wiping Kanagi's memories, though she doesn't know why. Mikoto ultimately interprets this as protection and intensifies her Witch hunting going forward despite Hanna's concerns.[2]
Hanna writes a deeply personal exchange diary entry revealing her past of bullying, her parents' deaths, and her time in an orphanage. She describes meeting Mikoto as the first light in her dark life and offers support. Touched, Mikoto writes an honest reply confessing all her lies but tears it up and instead sends a false reply claiming she is fine.[2]
While hunting, as there'd been a drought of Witches, Hanna confronts Mikoto about her pretending to not be exhausted and suggests they run away together. Mikoto refuses, claiming she has things to protect, and resolves to change her situation before truly facing Hanna.[2]
Immediately after this resolution, Mikoto collapses on an apartment complex rooftop. Her Soul Gem, overwhelmed by corruption, transforms into a Grief Seed and she becomes a Witch as Hanna screams out her name. In her final moments, Mikoto experiences agonizing pain and hears Mitama's wish in her head, which she deeply resonates with. She regrets running from her real parents and classmates, never confiding in Hanna, and erasing her father. As she transforms, she sees the sunset behind Hanna and feels gratitude that Hanna is with her until the end.[2]
During this same time as Mikoto despairs, Mitama makes her own wish, affecting Mikoto and her Witch.[Citation needed]
After escaping Mikoto's Witch, Kyubey approaches Hanna and explains that Witches come from Magical Girls. Suffering a complete mental breakdown, Hanna bashes her head open on the ground and realizes happiness was never going to be hers. Declaring she would rebel against the incubators, she uses her magic to bind Mikoto's witch to the Daito Apartment Complex, telling it to spread despair and promising to visit.[1]
Unbeknownst to even Mikoto, Mitama's wish during the exact moment Mikoto became a Witch allowed Mikoto to gain the power of Transplant magic, thus transplanting her persona into Hanna and maintaining her sense of self as a parasite within Hanna's mind.[3]
Some time later, Hanna uses her copied Magic to stop a Witch from moving and tells it her entire story. Hanna thanks it for spending time with her and decides to mind control it to cause mayhem, rather than killing it for a Grief Seed.[1]
Shortened
Hanna Sarasa wishes her bullies out of existence after losing her parents. Mikoto Sena wishes for freedom from an abusive household. The two meet and become friends, but Mikoto eventually turns into a witch, driving Hanna mad.
